Create and Describe Your Own Planet -
Description writing task
Term 2 Weeks 5-6
Purpose of this piece of writing is to:
Learning Intentions
I am learning to use language features to make
my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.
my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.
I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.
I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.
I will be successful when I can show….
-I have used some language features to make my
writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor,
alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)
writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor,
alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)
-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words
to include in my writing.
to include in my writing.
-I have used some Te Reo Māori
Focus
We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a descriptive
piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move
to your planet. You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like
on your planet.
piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move
to your planet. You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like
on your planet.
First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.
Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it successful
and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher
before you start writing.
and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher
before you start writing.
Third, do your piece of writing.
Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and
edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in
your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.
edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in
your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.
MY writing.
Praefeci
Praefeci is a unahiroa(comet) in the Illud galaxy it orbits the planet Richthofen which goes
around the three suns in 7 Earth years. It is in the Colls Spur Solar System the smallest
in the Illud galaxy it is in the Consensi cluster of three comets (one of them isPraefeci ) and
seven meteors. It's galaxy is 897 light years from our sun and has collided once in 4,923,743
years.Praefeci is an icy, hot, scary, tropical planet it has 17 animals but only 7 have
been found by the N.A.S.A space droids. There is a very small oxygen blanket over
the forests made by the the Polsem tribe. Humans can not breath unless they are near
the Polsem burrows in the forests. The left part of the comet is inhabited by Spullspurs little
100 eyed fat aliens that breathe sulphur they do not live in a forest but on floating rocks in the
side ice sea (the only water in the whole of the illud galaxy). The comet has five mysterious rocks
that act as moons but are too small to even fit melbourne !! The comet has been split into 5 different
places the grassy deserts the forests the red hot clay deserts (home to Coreos little fat round 1 eyed
8 armed alien) the dropping land with hanging rocks and the ice plains with the ice sea.
around the three suns in 7 Earth years. It is in the Colls Spur Solar System the smallest
in the Illud galaxy it is in the Consensi cluster of three comets (one of them isPraefeci ) and
seven meteors. It's galaxy is 897 light years from our sun and has collided once in 4,923,743
years.Praefeci is an icy, hot, scary, tropical planet it has 17 animals but only 7 have
been found by the N.A.S.A space droids. There is a very small oxygen blanket over
the forests made by the the Polsem tribe. Humans can not breath unless they are near
the Polsem burrows in the forests. The left part of the comet is inhabited by Spullspurs little
100 eyed fat aliens that breathe sulphur they do not live in a forest but on floating rocks in the
side ice sea (the only water in the whole of the illud galaxy). The comet has five mysterious rocks
that act as moons but are too small to even fit melbourne !! The comet has been split into 5 different
places the grassy deserts the forests the red hot clay deserts (home to Coreos little fat round 1 eyed
8 armed alien) the dropping land with hanging rocks and the ice plains with the ice sea.
The comet Praefeci is home to many aliens 17 to be exact but only 7 found they are the
Sollmacess, Donolakells and Porfectess all live in the forest with the Polsem .
Sollmacess, Donolakells and Porfectess all live in the forest with the Polsem .
The Spullspurs and the Stollwhale live in the freezing ice plains. The lone tribe of the coreos live far
in the heart of the clay desert. All the animals and aliens live in peace in their own land but have been
disturbed by the N.A.S.A droids. There have been lots of war against the droids and the Polsem
because of the Polsems galactic skin and there oxygen they are getting hāmate (killed) by the droids.
The droids have been fighting the Coreos in the clay desert to mine the clay and the Spullspurs and the
Stollwhales live in pace because it is too cold for droids where they live.
in the heart of the clay desert. All the animals and aliens live in peace in their own land but have been
disturbed by the N.A.S.A droids. There have been lots of war against the droids and the Polsem
because of the Polsems galactic skin and there oxygen they are getting hāmate (killed) by the droids.
The droids have been fighting the Coreos in the clay desert to mine the clay and the Spullspurs and the
Stollwhales live in pace because it is too cold for droids where they live.
Humans want to go to Praefeci to kill the people (Polsem ) to get the skin and oxygen in the body. Three
animals out of the seven are tame they are the Sollmacess, Donakalls and Porfectess. Mankind have
tried to get to Praefeci but have only sent droids. The N.A.S.A Space Center have been building big
helicopters to go to Praefeci but remain on earth all the same.
animals out of the seven are tame they are the Sollmacess, Donakalls and Porfectess. Mankind have
tried to get to Praefeci but have only sent droids. The N.A.S.A Space Center have been building big
helicopters to go to Praefeci but remain on earth all the same.
People should go there (wehn N.A.S.A figures out how to) to see the tropical forest and to go to
Richtofen or to see the animals. Praefeci is quite beautiful if there is peace but there is only peace in the
cold ice plains.
Richtofen or to see the animals. Praefeci is quite beautiful if there is peace but there is only peace in the
cold ice plains.
by Nathanael
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